Yesterday's commenters helped write today's dialogue--that's why it has such a gritty, realistic feel to it. Thank you commenters, for participating.
I'm doing a free presentation today (friday) at the OREM LIBRARY at 4:00, part of the Arts in the Park series. I'll be doing an hour-long Q&A/PowerPoint/Drawing extravaganza! So if you are in or around Orem, UT from 4-5--swing by and say hi.